Legacy LD5

Forum/Website Through 2017
About Us 
Member Sites 
Faibanx MUCK
Artist Gallery
It is currently Sun Dec 22, 2024 12:44 pm

All times are UTC - 9 hours [ DST ]




Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 9 posts ] 
Author Message
 Post subject: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 1:13 am 
Offline
User avatar
Movie Monster
Posts: 343
Species: Anthro Dragon
Location: Minnesota
It sure as heck is not much of anything, but I guess this is my first official furry writing. I've been in such a rut that I haven't written anything for myself in about a year, so I'm woefully out of practice. I also never actually wrote anything furry before...except maybe some dragons. Don't even know where it came from, just did it out of the blue. Hope it's enjoyable, even though it will sadden certain raptors with lack of s/poo. (Kidding!)

---------

Chad, a young gray wolf, yawned as he sat at the convenience store desk. The low hum of the fluorescent lights was beginning to get to him. Night shift was the absolute worst. Nothing to do but sit and be bored, clean, and deal with weirdos. Just as he was about to nod off into the cash register, the bell hanging over the door jingled, causing him to jerk his head back up and focus on his newly arrived customer. A fox stepped in the doorway, dressed in tight black spandex shorts, a leather strap around one ankle, and a kind of black leather vest. Oh great, thought Chad, another weirdo to deal with.

The fox looked around curiously, walking up and down the short aisles of snacks. He stopped at the gummy bears and snatched up a bag, instantly tearing it open and shaking some into his hand. He tossed the bears into his maw and chewed contentedly, becoming interested in his reflection in the security mirror. After some time of watching the fox posing, Chad decided to speak up.

“Sir, are you going to pay for those?” he asked. The fox was silent. He finished his pose and slowly looked over at Chad.

“No,” was all the fox replied, in a somewhat quiet voice. Chad sighed inwardly. It never failed that someone during the week was going to give him a hard time.

“Sir, you're going to have to pay for them or I'm going to call the police.” Chad was about to reach for the phone, when he was dumbfounded to find he couldn't reach it. His arms seemed to have gotten shorter. No, all of him was getting shorter! He panicked and stumbled out from behind the counter, finding the store looming up around him as he continued shrinking. A sick feeling spread through his entire body, and before he could even comprehend his situation he was standing in the middle of the store floor, only half an inch tall. He looked around in a daze. From this new perspective he could tell that his cleaning abilities were rather lacking, as he noted the many bits of litter that were now as big as him. Then he saw the black furred paws of the fox and his situation came flooding back. With a tiny squeak of a yelp, he looked way up at the now towering fox, who was still idly eating his gummy bears and looking down at him with only mild interest.

“W-what in the hell, dude?” Chad yelled in his squeaky little voice. The fox merely started to walk towards him, those huge feet thudding ominously on the tile floor. “N-no s-stay away from me!” shrieked the tiny Chad as he tried to run. He only made it a few inches before he tripped on some stray crumb and landed hard on his face. Dazed he rolled over on his back and groaned. When Chad's vision cleared, he saw the fox looming directly above him. He was looking directly up at the black padded underside of the fox's raised foot. Chad let out a frenzied scream just as the fox dropped the foot on top of him, muffling the tiny cry beneath the huge ballpad. Chad struggled desperately under the oppressive weight, but he was powerless to stop the increasing pressure. Confused thoughts raced through the young wolf's mind as he felt bones snap like twigs. He passed out just before the huge ballpad crushed him against the tile floor.

Samael smirked as he pulled his foot slowly back across the tile, revealing a streak of blood which gleamed sickly in the cold fluorescent light. After making sure there was nothing left of the clerk but an unrecognizable stain, he casually walked over and grabbed another bag of gummy bears from the shelf before exiting the store into the stale night air with a final jingle of the bell.

“Man, I love these things,” he said to himself as he neatly bit the head off one with his sharp teeth. He walked off down the sidewalk, leaving the empty store behind him.
_________________
January 4th, 2010 (Faibanx MUCK):
Blue says, "I dont complain."

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:49 am 
Offline
User avatar
Talking Tyrannosaur
Posts: 861
Species: Tyrannosaurus
Very alluringly ruthless and efficient!
_________________
Image

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 6:27 pm 
Offline
User avatar
Movie Monster
Posts: 343
Species: Anthro Dragon
Location: Minnesota
Why thank you.
_________________
January 4th, 2010 (Faibanx MUCK):
Blue says, "I dont complain."

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:29 pm 
Offline
User avatar
Blue Raptor
Posts: 1277
Species: anthro raptor
Location: Raptorland
Why not? :)

A nice little short story. Probably even better if one is into :ninastomp:
_________________
I am raptor.

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:11 am 
Offline
User avatar
Magnificent Bastard
Posts: 544
Location: Wherever there be feetzorz
"What would you do for a klondike bar a pack of gummy bears?"

Oh ho ho ho. I apologize for merely glossing over this yesterday. This is worth at least two reads in quick succession. Just enough characterization to make it sufficiently creepy. Very much like minus.
_________________
“Frankly, I’ve never thought of folks like you in terms of your species. I see you as part of a larger community.
The community of things that go ‘SQEAK’ when I step on them.” –Bob the Dinosaur
“A Sprotchymon's musings always take a lot of processor power, but are just as always worth it.” -Blue

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 11:07 am 
Offline
Site Admin
User avatar
Oracle of the Slipper
Posts: 2661
Species: Weesaur
Location: Ankh Ridge, Alyeska
I agree...it's just the right amount of setup and detail for a nice spooge. :) Nice job!

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 11:07 am 
Offline
User avatar
Movie Monster
Posts: 343
Species: Anthro Dragon
Location: Minnesota
Thanks. It did turn out quite brief, but it felt complete to me where it was. My pretentious side labeled it flash fiction (which it fits nicely into) and called it a day. It was also just me feeling out the character and writing in general again. I had some more ideas along these lines, but we'll see how well I stick with it.
_________________
January 4th, 2010 (Faibanx MUCK):
Blue says, "I dont complain."

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Wed May 21, 2014 11:23 pm 
Offline
User avatar
Movie Monster
Posts: 343
Species: Anthro Dragon
Location: Minnesota
JordantheDragon wrote:
I just wanted to say that this is a very good story, it was brief but adequate & I like the subtle cruelty. :)


Thanks a lot! Every positive comment, even after a long period of time, is always welcome and helpful to very low self-esteem dragons.
_________________
January 4th, 2010 (Faibanx MUCK):
Blue says, "I dont complain."

Top
  Profile
 
 Post subject: Re: A 'Little' Scene - I done wrote a thing!
PostPosted: Mon May 26, 2014 7:58 am 
Offline
Site Admin
User avatar
Oracle of the Slipper
Posts: 2661
Species: Weesaur
Location: Ankh Ridge, Alyeska
No, don't...he'll get airs and graces and be even more cruel to weesaurs! :)

Top
  Profile
 
Display posts from previous:  Sort by  
Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 9 posts ] 


All times are UTC - 9 hours [ DST ]


Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 0 guests


You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot post attachments in this forum

Search for:
Jump to:  
cron


LD5's forum is powered by nanosaurs running free and wee phpBB © 2008 phpBB Group
Copied Right 2473 Lava Dome Five Industries. This system contains adult material and is for big saurs only.